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Forever in an Hourglass by CatNCobra Forever in an Hourglass by CatNCobra
Forever in an Hourglass
By: CatNCobra


Forever in an hourglass,
Through which time slips so quick.
Inspired for this little rhyme,
By man kinds unreal magic trick.

Time is an illusion,
As is all measurement.
Not a single truth to find,
Though we treasure it.

We waste and wish for more,
That which is not real.
Why does it control us so,
The thing we can not feel.

“We have as long as you want”,
Said to me a bright young girl.
“Forever in an hourglass,
Let’s watch the sand storm whirl.”


-We have as long as you want,
Forever in an hourglass.



Poem written and illustration edited by me [link]

Original image [link] used for the illustration created by [link]
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Lucian-Ciel Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
this is so cool. great art work.
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Zeno78 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2010
I absolutely love the poem, very inspiring!! I also loved the use of the abstract hourglass design. However i found the font distracting to the whole experience, even though it was a very appropriated design to accompany the illustration. Overall i really enjoyed this piece, nice work :w00t!:
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CatNCobra Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2010
thanks :)
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Skillns Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010
Kinda emo, but still good.
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MPtribe Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2010
What a beautiful poem..!! I really love it..^^
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CatNCobra Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2010
thank you very much :)
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Same-side Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2010   Writer
While the subject/theme of your poem is good, it seems a little over-written, over-stylized, and over-thought. Perhaps, it's just a difference in aesthetic perspectives, but in my opinion, the poem's language is compromised because you are trying to say too much in too little space. The phrasing seems forced in order to fit the rhyme scheme, and that is never pleasant for the average reader to wade through.
The final two stanzas are the exception to this criticism, however, and in their simplicity, they prove more powerful than the rest of the piece combined. I love your word choices there, and the rhyme is clever.
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CatNCobra Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2010
Though I cant agree with most of what you said (I honestly dont agree, its not just taking it too personal or being upset) I still appreciate the criticism.

thank you for your input :)
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Antesoph Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2010
great work! For some reason, it reminded me of Alice in Wonderland..
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CatNCobra Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2010
haha I can see that now that you said something. dosent have anything to do with that though :)
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